A student you know is coming to visit the town or city where you live next weekend. Write a letter to the student. In the letter, • tell the student about some places in your town or city that he/she should visit. • give instructions about transportation in your city. • give contact details for the student so he/she can get in touch with you. Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear...
#student #visit #town #city #weekend #places #instructions #transportation #contact #touch #addresses
Dear, Macclamour
Hi Mac, How are you? I hope you
in
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are in
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a health
health
condition. I am Mike, your teacher Replace the word
healthy
in
Gan's Memoriam Senior High School. I Change preposition
at
have receive
your epistle Wrong verb form
received
last
week about your planning to visit
Sandas
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Sandals
on
next weekend. I heard you will Change preposition
apply
to
come to Magamas City, Change the verb form
apply
that is
my hometown. I am
very happy if you Wrong verb form
will be
comes
and Change the verb form
come
visit
me on
next weekend.
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apply
Due to
summer
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the summer
holiday
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holiday,
this
is a good chance for you to visit
Magama this
month. Because,
so many places that you can Remove the comma
apply
visit
on this
summer.
If you arrive at Magamas in the morning, I suggest you to
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apply
visit
Mapamapa Garden on
the evening and Change preposition
in
than
you can have Replace the word
then
a
dinner at Samaba Restaurant. That place Remove the article
apply
are
near to Gundam Beach. You can enjoy the sunset before you Change the verb form
is
having
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have
a
dinner at the beach. I Remove the article
apply
also
suggest you to
stay at Remove the particle
apply
Miapa
hostel. It is located in the city centre. It will Correct article usage
the Miapa
makes
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make
you
easy to find any groceries, shops, Correct pronoun usage
it
restaurant
, or public transportation. My house is near to Fix the agreement mistake
restaurants
Miapa
hostel, if you visiting
my house it will take 30 minutes by Wrong verb form
visit
taxi
or bus.
The transportation in Miapa
is realy
easy to find. You can go anywhere by bus or online Correct your spelling
really
taxi
that can you book via mobile phone. Just download taxi
mobile on your phone and Capitalize word
Taxi
than
choose the area Replace the word
then
that
you stayed Correct word choice
where
while
you in
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are in
Miapa
, then
you can book that taxi
everytime
you need.
If you need to get any information regarding Replace the word
every time
Miapa
and surrounding
you can contact me Correct pronoun usage
its surrounding
everytime
by phone Replace the word
every time
564322
. You ought to buy Change preposition
at 564322
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a simcard
simcard
first when you Correct your spelling
sim card
arrived
. I Wrong verb form
arrive
worried
if you can't get Add a missing verb
am worried
a
public wifi that makes Correct article usage
apply
you
hard to call me. Please inform me if you Correct pronoun usage
it
already
at Add a missing verb
are already
Miapa
as soon as possible. Enjoy your holiday
Yours sincerely,
MikeSubmitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
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logical structure
It's crucial to establish a coherent logical structure to guide the reader clearly through your letter. Your letter lacked strong paragraphing and sometimes introduced ideas randomly.
greeting and closing
You have appropriately used a greeting and a closing in your letter, which is good. However, make sure to use appropriate titles and names in your greeting to maintain formality and personalize your letter.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph should focus on one main idea. In some cases, you combined different ideas in a single paragraph. Consider organizing information more neatly into separate paragraphs.
complete response
The response should address all parts of the task. Some areas were covered well, but more detail and expansion on each point would improve task achievement.
suitable writing tone
Although a casual tone can be friendly, remember to maintain a suitable writing tone that is appropriate for the context of the task and your relationship with the reader.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.