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This line graph illustrates the number of tourists who visited Caribbean islands between 2010 and 2018, measured in millions

This line graph illustrates the number of tourists who visited Caribbean islands between 2010 and 2018, measured in millions
#line #tourists #caribbean #islands #millions
The line graph provides information about the
amount
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number
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 of
tourists
in
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on
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Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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island
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islands
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 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
, the total number of
tourists
in
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on
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 Caribbean
island
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islands
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 had a steady increase over the period given.
Additionally
,
tourists
 who stayed on cruise ships experienced
a
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significant growth and had the highest amount of visitors
in
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at
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 the end of
period
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the period
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 compared to
who
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those who
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 stayed on
island
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the island
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. In 2010, the total amount of
tourists
 was one million and
then
 the figure began to rise steadily until it reached its highest point of three point five
millions
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million
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 in 2017. In the early
of
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period, the
visitors
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number of visitors
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 who stayed on cruise ships was the lowest compared to
tourists
 staying on
island
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the island
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. The figure grew to 0.5 million by 2011However, by 2017, the number experienced a rapid increase to two
millions
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million
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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