The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
The table illustrates data
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six important cities over the world, which are London, Paris, Tokyo,Washington DC ,Kyoto and Los Angeles, which provide underground
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transportation
systems
.
This
data is being compared through three factors which are the open date of the system, the route distance and the number of people who are visiting the system yearly. It is clear from the table that there are fluctuations in the individuals who are visiting every mentioned system. There is a noticeable difference between the
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capital of Japan's
systems
and the capital of the United Kingdom's
systems
. London's
systems
are more ancient than Tokyo's
systems
which were built in the years 1863 and 1927 respectively.
However
, Tokyo serves 1927 million passengers compared to London's
systems
which have nearly 775 million passengers every twelve months.
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closer examination of the figures for the capital of the United Kingdom's subways reveals the longest distance
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least 394 kilometres.
On the other hand
, Kyoto's subways have the shortest route length which is around 11 kilometres of route.
However
, Los Angeles's subways are the newest
systems
which were built in 2001 and occupy a rank of two in the smallest number of passengers after Kyoto's
systems
which are about 50 and 45 million visitors per twelve months respectively.
This
table shows that there are some underground railway
systems
that need to be extended
due to
the large number of visitors they have despite they are very old
systems
.
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