The line chart below shows the public transport usage in four major cities around the world from 1980 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below shows the public transport usage in four major cities around the world from 1980 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart given illustrates the common
transpotasion
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transportation
which has
usaged
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usage
in Tokyo, New York, London,
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and Sdyney
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Sdyney
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Sydney
from 1980 to 2019.
Overall
, Tokyo
is
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has
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the highest usage
transport
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of transport
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compared to other cities. In 1980, people who
are
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were
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using
publict
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public
tranportasion
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transportation
about 11
points
.
Then
in
the
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apply
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1985, it
was has
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had
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increase
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increased
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by one point
slighty
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slightly
11. After 5 years, it rose exactly 20
points
.
While
in 1995, it
has
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apply
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increased
around
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to around
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23.
However
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However,
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in 2000, it
has
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apply
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declined
experinces
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experiences
experience
slightly about 21.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, it
has grown
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grew
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in 2005
about
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to about
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35,
subsequently
, it
has
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apply
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increased in 2010
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to
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approximately 45.
Then
it
has
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apply
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experienced growth
exactly
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of exactly
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50
in
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at
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the
end
of
period
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the period
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.
On the other hand
, London has significantly
rose
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risen in
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a
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the
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number of usage public transport
started
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starting at
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about 15
points
in 1980. There it
is increasing
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increased
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significantly until the
end
of
period
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the period
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.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, New York
city
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City
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is
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had
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the
thrid
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third
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number of
higher
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apply
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commuters transportation in the world around 20
points
in 1980.
Whereas
, it has increased during the 20 years ( about 25, 30, 39, and 41).
However
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However,
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in 2005, it
has
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apply
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decreased
about
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by about
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40
points
. In 2010 it
is
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apply
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experienced
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an
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increase until the
end
of
period
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the period
a period
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in 2019
approximately
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by approximately
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50
points
.
Moreover
, Tokyo
has
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apply
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started almost
quarter
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a quarter
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of 30
points
in 1980.
In addition
,it has been rose significantly in 1958,1990,1995,2000,2005,2010 ( exactly 30,40,50,55,60,70, and 75) until the
end
of
period
2019 about 79
points
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words points, end, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.

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