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The line graph gives information relating to the average number of British travelers using car, bus and train to commute on a daily basis over a period of 6 decades, starting from 1970.

The line graph gives information relating to the average number of British travelers using car, bus and train to commute on a daily basis over a period of 6 decades, starting from 1970.
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The line graph illustrates the number of British people who always travel using three different vehicles to come and go on a daily activity in the
last
past
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sixty years, starting in 1970.
overall
, the total of the
pessanger
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passenger
passengers
 who used to get a
car
 and train is increasing
while
bus
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the bus
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passanger
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passenger
 is going to decrease. in the early stage of the year
in
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1970, the commuters who used to take
train
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the train
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apporximately
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approximately
 2.75
millions
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million
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,
while
bus
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buses
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 and
car
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cars
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is
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were
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 close to 4 and 5
millions
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million
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of
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each,
untill
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until
 1980 the number
is
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was
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 stable with
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the car
a car
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car
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cars
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is
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being
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 the highest.
in
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From
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 1980 up to 2010, the
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number of poeple
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poeple
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people
 who use
car
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cars
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 and
bus
 is increase consistently where the
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number of passangers
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passangers
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passengers
 of
car
is
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dominantly at more than 6
millions
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million
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. over the
last
 two decades,
Bus
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the Bus
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passanger
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passenger
 is going to the lower position which is changed by train
passangers
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passengers
 and
supprisingly
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surprisingly
 to be the 2nd position. In the
last
 year, the
car
passanger
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passenger
 is going to the top
rocketly
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rocket
rocketry
rockets
 with
the
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9
millions
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million
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 people.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, bus, millions with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • commute
  • mode of transport
  • fluctuating trend
  • downward trend
  • public transport policies
  • preferences
  • railway infrastructure
  • economic factors
  • environmental factors
  • technological factors
  • sustainable commuting
  • noticeable increase
  • investments
  • dominance
  • propensity
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