The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart shows the proportion of
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in The Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia residing in cities between 1970 to 2020,
as well as
the forecasts for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
, the
trend
for all countries increased from the early period until the end of
prediction
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year, except one of them, The Philippines, witnessed a fluctuation before steadily
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again. By far, all
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the
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three countries which are Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia have a rising
trend
of people living in the cities from 1970 to 2040. Malaysia witnessed a significant jump starting from 1990 until the year 2024 and
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to rocket until 2040.
This
trend
is much likely the same as Indonesia, only with around 10% to 15% lower proportion at all times.
On the other hand
, Thailand experienced
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quiet
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slight growth between 1990 to 2020 and
foreseen
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to have a big leap until 2040 to almost a 20% difference.
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contrary
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, The Philippines did not always have a climbing
trend
. It dramatically went up from 1980 to 1990 with approximately 30% to almost
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half,
then
it gradually went down until 2010 to around 40%. Afterwards, it rose again with
moderate
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trend
until 2024 and
predicted
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to continue to rise until 2040.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trend with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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