The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph gives information regarding the number of shopping places that were established and closed in one region, commencing from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, both new and closed
stores
experienced a decrease throughout the period of time. In the early period, there were 8,000 shopping places that were established. Unfortunately, a decade later, the figures receded significantly by almost 4,000. In 2014, the total surged steadily, reaching more than 6,000
stores
. The trend did not
last
long, the number of shopping places receded, hitting its low point of about 3,000 in 2018.
On the other hand
, there were plenty of
stores
that were closed in 2011, even though it was 2,000 fewer than the new ones. 2 years later, the amount of shut-down shops increased, experiencing a peak of just above 7,000. In 2015, the rates of the
stores
collapsed dramatically with the numbers around 500.
Finally
, 3 years later, it resurged more than 5,000 spots.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words stores with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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