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The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie chart provides data about the
reasons
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 why individuals
travel
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 to
work
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 by bicycle or by car.
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, the main
reasons
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 why humans
travel
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 to
work
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 by bicycle are less pollution and fitness,
whereas
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 the main
reason
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 for driving to
work
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 is comfort. As can be seen, the main
reasons
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 for cycling to
work
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 are less pollution and fitness. Both have the same percentages which is 30 per
cent
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. The other
reason
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 for cycling to
work
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 is no parking problems. It has 15 per
cent
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 which is
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half of less pollution and fitness. People
also
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travel
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 to
work
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 by bicycle because of no costs and
and
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faster driving. The percentages of no costs(13 per
cent
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) and
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faster driving(12 per
cent
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 ) are pretty similar. The
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reason
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 for cycling to
work
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 is faster driving. The main
reason
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 for driving to
work
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 is comfort with
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 percentage of 40 per
cent
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. After comfort comes distance to
work
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 which
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 21 per
cent
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. The
reasons
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faster
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 than cycling and 
need
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the need
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 to carry things to
work
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 have the same proportions which is 14 per
cent
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. The
least
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reason
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 why individuals
travel
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 to
work
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 by car compared to other
reasons
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 is safer than cycling. It has 11 per
cent
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, travel, work, reason, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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