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The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart provides data about the
reasons
 why individuals
travel
 to
work
 by bicycle or by car.
Overall
, the main
reasons
 why humans
travel
 to
work
 by bicycle are less pollution and fitness,
whereas
 the main
reason
 for driving to
work
 is comfort. As can be seen, the main
reasons
 for cycling to
work
 are less pollution and fitness. Both have the same percentages which is 30 per
cent
. The other
reason
 for cycling to
work
 is no parking problems. It has 15 per
cent
 which is
the
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half of less pollution and fitness. People
also
travel
 to
work
 by bicycle because of no costs and
and
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faster driving. The percentages of no costs(13 per
cent
) and
and
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faster driving(12 per
cent
 ) are pretty similar. The
least
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last
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reason
 for cycling to
work
 is faster driving. The main
reason
 for driving to
work
 is comfort with
the
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a
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 percentage of 40 per
cent
. After comfort comes distance to
work
 which
has
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 21 per
cent
. The
reasons
faster
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 than cycling and 
need
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the need
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 to carry things to
work
 have the same proportions which is 14 per
cent
. The
least
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last
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reason
 why individuals
travel
 to
work
 by car compared to other
reasons
 is safer than cycling. It has 11 per
cent
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, travel, work, reason, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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