The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food (in grams per week), in the UK from 1970 to 1990.

The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food (in grams per week), in the UK from 1970 to 1990.
The line graph provides data about the
consumption
of
hamburger
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hamburgers
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,
fish
and
chips
and
pizza
in Britain from 1970 to 1990.
Overall
,
initially
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initially,
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the highest
consumption
rate
had
pizza
,
whereas
the lowest
consumption
rate
had
hamburger
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hamburgers
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. As can clearly be seen, in 1970 the highest
consumption
rate
had
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pizza
. The
consumption
rate
was 300
grams
. After 1970 the
consumption
rate
of
pizza
started to decrease and in 1990 the
consumption
rate
was approximately 200
grams
. The
consumption
rate
of
fish
and
chips
initially
was less than 100
grams
,
however
, it started to increase over the years and in 1990 was its peak. In 1990 the
consumption
rate
of
fish
and
chips
was 500
grams
. In 1970, the lowest
consumption
rate
compared to other types of fast food in Britain
had
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was
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hamburger
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hamburgers
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. The
consumption
rate
was more or less 50
grams
. In 1980 the
rate
rose and was almost 100
grams
. From 1980 to 1985 the
rate
gradually increased. From 1985 to 1990 the
rate
abruptly rose from 100
grams
to 300. In 1990 the highest
consumption
rate
had
fish
and
chips
(500
grams
),
while
the lowest
consumption
rate
had
pizza
with the
rate
of roughly 200
grams
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "initially".
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, fish, chips, pizza, rate, grams with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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