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Some people think our first impression of someone is important, while others think we should not judge another person so quickly and should take our time to know them better. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is believed by some individuals that our
first
impression
 of someone is essential,
however
, others reckon that we should not
judge
 another
person
 quickly and we have to take our
time
know
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to know
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 them better. I reckon
,
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apply
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first
impression
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impressions
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is
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are
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 vital,
however
, we should not
judge
 another human quickly and should take
time
 to know them better. On the
one
 hand, some
people
 suppose that
first
impression
 is crucial and it is possible
and
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apply
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enough to know what kind of a
person
 a
person
 is. There are some
people
 who have the ability to know a
person
’s character in no
time
.
For example
,
one
 of my friends is
one
 of them. He is able to know what kind of
person
 a
person
 is very quickly in the
first
 meeting. He says that it is very clear and it does not take much
time
 to explore a
person
. He believes that
first
impression
 is the most important thing and it cannot be wrong.
On the other hand
, there are some human beings who assume that it is not right to
judge
 other
people
 by
the
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their
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first
 appearance. They believe that it takes
time
 to know more about a
person
. In their
opinions
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opinions,
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 there are
people
 who can hide their true identities, or there are many introverts who are shy and they do not reveal who they really are.
For instance
,
one
 of my acquaintances considers himself
as
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an introvert and he is unable to open up with individuals whom he
first
 meets, it takes
time
 for him to trust them,
consequently
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consequently,
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 they will never be able to know who he is by their
first
impression
. In conclusion, some
people
 reckon that our
first
impression
 of someone is crucial,
however
, others reckon that we should not
judge
 a
person
 quickly and ought to take
time
 to know them better. I strongly believe that
first
impression
Fix the agreement mistake
impressions
show examples
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 vital,
however
, we should not
judge
 a
person
 quickly and should take
time
 to know them better.
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Task Achievement
For task achievement, ensure that you fully address all parts of the task. Your introduction and conclusion present a clear opinion, but the main body lacks a detailed exploration of each side. Incorporate a broader range of ideas with deeper analysis for a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, structure your essay with clear and logical transitions. Use topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to introduce the main idea, followed by supporting sentences and a concluding sentence. Vary your sentence structures and use a range of cohesive devices effectively.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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