The table data below shows the average band scores for students from different language groups taking the IELTS General Test in 2010.
The table displays
an
average Correct article usage
the
band
marks for students from various language groups participating in the IELTS General Test in the year 2010.
Overall
, all the
four countries have an Correct article usage
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overall
score
which is regarded as a pass. German
has the highest band
score
whilst Malay has the minimum band
overally
.
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overall
To begin
with, German
and French have got
high Verb problem
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overall
band
scores of 6.7 and 6.5 respectively. It must be noted that German
has the greatest score
in the skill of speaking as well as
writing.
More so, Indonesia and Malay have overall
scores of 6.3 and 6.4 respectively. However
, it is important to mention that Indonesia is second from
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skill
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skills
is
to be considered. Malay has Correct subject-verb agreement
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got
a higher reading Verb problem
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score
of 6.4 as compared to Indonesia which has got
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