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The line graph gives information relating to the average number of British travelers using car, bus and train to commute on a daily basis over a period of 6 decades, starting from 1970.

The line graph gives information relating to the average number of British travelers using car, bus and train to commute on a daily basis over a period of 6 decades, starting from 1970.
The given line graph shows the daily amount of people commuting by car,
bus
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 or train on average in the UK from 1970 to 2030. Generally speaking, the
number
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 of English citizens
which
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who
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 use their cars to reach their destinations is increasing over the
period
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. Meanwhile,
bus
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 usage remains constant, with a slight decline. On the other side, the average
number
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 of passengers who commute by train is gradually going up. In 1970, around 5
million
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 UK citizens were travelling by car.
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number
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 was almost unchanged until 1980, when it started to climb, reaching approximately 7
million
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 commuters by 2000. Car figures hovered around that
number
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 for the following decades and it is expected to continue leaping until the end of the
period
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. At the start of the
period
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, there were roughly 4
million
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bus
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 travellers.
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figured
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 has been slowly decreasing for the
last
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 decades and it is
espected
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expected
 to proceed
this
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 way for the next years, culminating at just above 3
million
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. The reverse is the case for train utilization, which commenced at nearly 2
million
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 and
then
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it
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apply
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kept rising until 2000. From that year until 2010 it plateaued at 3
million
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 users, starting
then
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 a rising
period
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 and surpassing
bus
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 travelling around the year 2014. Just
as
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like
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 the average of cars, the prediction is that the
number
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 of people using trains will continue growing.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words bus, number, period, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • commute
  • mode of transport
  • fluctuating trend
  • downward trend
  • public transport policies
  • preferences
  • railway infrastructure
  • economic factors
  • environmental factors
  • technological factors
  • sustainable commuting
  • noticeable increase
  • investments
  • dominance
  • propensity
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