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Some people think that planting trees in open space in cities and towns is more important than building houses.To what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #trees #space #cities #towns #houses
Tress
 play a vital role in our
life
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 as
,
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 our lives are not imagined without them.Does
this
 statement
holds
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 the logic that planting
tress
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trees
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 in urban areas
are
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is
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 more beneficial than in building houses? Primarily no,
i
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I
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am disagree
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disagree
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 with the given statement. First and foremost, plants and
tress
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trees
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 give life to humans and purify
the
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apply
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nature as
it
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they
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 release
the
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oxygen and
absorb
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absorbs
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the
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carbon dioxide.
Therefore
, it should be planted
whereever
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wherever
 possible.
In addition
 to
this
, the building areas are very
conjusted
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congested
confused
 and tenants need some time to relax in
open
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the open
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 air and if they see greenery around them, they can relieve their stress and feel
more
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fresh.Eventually, trees must be planted in building areas as it provides the same benefits
of
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as
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 plants grown in open spaces.
Furthermore
,
the
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planting
tress
 in building with different ideas
such
 as in
form
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the form
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 of parks,
terrace
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and terrace
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 gardening will attract more residents;
there by
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thereby
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increase
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increasing
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 the revenue of
place
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the place
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.
Consequently
,planting trees in buildings will help to attract more tourists and residents. Having discussed the topic at length it can be concluded that plants
plays
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paramount
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 role in human life and can be grown anywhere and it will only give the profit
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Main points are not always supported by relevant examples or explanations. For each point you make, include specific details or examples to strengthen your argument.
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The response does not fully address all parts of the task. The question is about the importance of planting trees versus building houses, and the essay should accordingly address this comparison with a balanced discussion.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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