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Because of the covid epidemic, many people prefer to work or study from home instead of going to their workplace or university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this develpment?

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The way of learning and working style has been changing after the
covid
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COVID-19
 epidemic. A large number of individuals like to lead or
work
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home
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 rather than the traditional classroom and workplace method. Travel cost is reduced and flexibility
are
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 the benefits of
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 trend,
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, distortion and lack of social behaviour are the drawbacks
it
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.
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work
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working
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home
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. The commute expenses are reduced is
the
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one of the major
benefit
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. To clarify,
workers
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 can
work
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 at the place without going to companies through
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the internet
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internet
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 and computers, and
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, employees have a chance to spend their family members.
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, in India, many organisations have been starting
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work
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home
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 so that worker's stress reduces and
performance
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their performance
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also
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 increases.
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, flexibility of working time leads to
do
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multitask
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 at a time in order
to
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 people
can
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earn more money. Many
workers
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 have two or more jobs from
work
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home
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 in orse
ro
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to
 they can manage their financial expenses. Despite these benefits,
this
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 trend has two main drawbacks. Distraction is one of the main disadvantages of
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work
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working
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 from
home
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.
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 is because
,
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 family members and
childrens
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children
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 will disturb
to
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the
workers
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,
thus
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, their performance level might be reduced.
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, lack of socializing can increase when
workers
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 are working from
home
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. You clarify
,
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 they do not have a chance to meet and interact
their
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with their
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 fellow
colleageoue
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colleague
colleagues
,
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, they will get anxiety, stress,
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depression
me
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 psychological problems.
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, it creates employees
are
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being alone without getting any companions so
that
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they feel
insecurity
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.
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,
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work
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working
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home
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 is quite popular after the
vobid
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void
valid
 restrictions. The commute expenses will be reduced and flexibility
are
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is
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 the
advantages
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 of
this
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 phenomenon. It creates
distraction
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 from
work
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 and
lack
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a lack
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 of socializing
to
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with
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 other
workers
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 are the disadvantages it.
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coherence cohesion
Your essay shows some attempt at logical structuring, however, it is inconsistent with frequent instances of unclear progression of ideas. There is a lack of appropriate paragraphing, which makes the essay difficult to follow. Aim to have a clear opening statement, followed by distinct paragraphs for each main point, and a summarizing conclusion.
task achievement
The task response is minimal. It appears that the essay attempts to address the advantages and disadvantages of the trend towards remote work, yet the examples provided are not sufficiently developed or relevant. Furthermore, there are inaccuracies and misunderstandings evident in the content. Ensure that you address all parts of the task, provide clear and relevant examples, and elaborate on your points to fully support your argument.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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