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The chart below shows the expenditure of 2 countries on consumer goods in 2010.

The chart below shows the expenditure of 2 countries on consumer goods in 2010.
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The picture given depicts the spending of The United Kingdom and
France
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 in 2010 on several commodities. As can be seen from the graph, it is readily apparent that both countries had the highest expenditure on cars with more than 400.000
pounds
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 sterling spent in said year. Cars were the highest-selling commodities for the two nations.
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, the trend started to differ afterwards. For
France
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, the second highest expenditure was computers with almost 400.000
pounds
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 spent
while
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 England used it up on books with just above 400.000
pounds
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 sterling.
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 is
then
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 followed by the third highest expenses which were dissimilar for both countries. Books were in the third position for
France
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 with exactly 300 thousand
pounds
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 applied. Cameras were in the case for England with just over 350 thousand
pounds
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. On the lower sides of the categories, there are perfume, cameras, and computers. The fourth position for
France
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 was filled with perfume with close to 200.000
pounds
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.
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, The United Kingdom spent 350.000
pounds
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 on computers.
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 but not least, in the fifth rank,
France
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 spent merely 150.000
pounds
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 on cameras
whereas
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 England spent nearly 150.000 on fragrances.
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