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In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing, people feel less safe than ever before. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

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In some countries,
although
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 the rates of heinous
crimes
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 are declining, the public
feel
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feels
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 less safe than
the
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in the
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 past. The reasons for
this
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 are small
crimes
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are
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still
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exist
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 in society, and public
safety
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 is not ensured everywhere. To solve
this
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 problem, all sorts of
crimes
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 should be considered as serious and
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safety
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the safety
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 of the public should be ensured everywhere by monitoring. The primary reason for feeling less safe by
people
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 is small
crimes
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 are still prevalent in society. If small
crimes
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such
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 as bullying, pick-pocketing and teasing
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exist
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 in society, they affect the sense of security of
people
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.
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,
people
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 feel insecure about their lives, properties and dignity. Another reason for
people
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 feeling less safe is
people
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 are not safe everywhere because
crimes
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 can happen anytime anywhere. Someone can become a victim of a
crime
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 even when they are at home.
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, in India, many women
are
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 not
feeling
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feel
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 safe even in their homes because they become the victims of domestic violence by their intimate partners. To solve
this
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 issue, all types of
crimes
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 should be addressed seriously. If the protective service of each country takes effective and appropriate measures to control all types of small and big
crimes
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, the sense of
safety
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 among
people
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 will be ensured.
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, public
safety
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 should be ensured everywhere by monitoring the
safety
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 of the public. If any
crime
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 occurs inside or outside
home
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the home
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 or online, there should be
proper
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the proper
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 way to monitor and report it.
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, in recent times, in Bangladesh, the rate of cyber
crime
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 has dropped significantly because the government has enhanced the way to report the
crime
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 immediately over
phone
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the phone
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 to the police and monitor the
safety
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 of the victims. In conclusion, the reasons for the public feeling less safe are small
crimes
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, which make the public insecure about their lives and properties, and the public is not safe everywhere. To solve
this
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 issue, all sorts of small and serious
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crime
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crimes
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 should be addressed with equal importance, and public
safety
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 should be ensured everywhere.

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task achievement
Ensure that the reasons provided are fully developed and elaborated upon to enhance clarity and depth of argumentation.
coherence cohesion
Consider linking the points within each paragraph more explicitly, using linking words, to enhance the logical progression of your ideas and ensure a smooth flow.
task achievement
The essay provides a clear response to the task and identifies specific causes of the problem as well as suggesting measures.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are both well-presented, clearly detailing the issues and solutions.
task achievement
The inclusion of examples, such as the situation in India and Bangladesh, strengthens the response and demonstrates relevance to real-world contexts.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • availability heuristic
  • media coverage
  • misinformation
  • urbanization
  • community cohesion
  • justice system
  • economic inequality
  • community policing
  • media literacy
  • surveillance
  • swift justice
  • social cohesion
  • neighborhood watch
  • deterrent
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