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maps illustrate teh different parts of life cycle of production of a single product

maps illustrate teh different parts of life cycle of production of a single product
The map illustrates the different aspects of the environment that were affected by an unspecified
product
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 during its entire life span.
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, the process consists of seven stages starting with planning and designing, before ending with recycling of the end-products.
First,
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step 1 started by planning and designing the
product
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, before the consumption of various materials and energy resources. After that, the
product
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 is produced, followed by packaging and distributing it to various shops. In the next stage, the
product
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 is sold to customers. Once
this
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 step is completed, it is used by customers for different purposes. What is more, after using the
product
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, it is either disposed
or
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it is
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recycled in the final step of the cycle to use it again as
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a materials
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materials
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 for
the
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production.
In addition
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, customers could provide their feedback to improve the
the
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planning and the
desgin
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design
 stage of the
product
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words product with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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