Nowadays more tasks at home and work are being performed by robots. Why do you think this is happenung? Is it a positive or negative development?

Robotics increasingly play a role both in the home and the workplace.
This
is
due to
the advancements in technology and it should be seen as a positive development because it helps to reduce a person's workload. The newest update in machines makes people rely on it.
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happened because of the
ability
of mechanical devices
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more complicated data from various sources.
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, today's high-tech
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ability
in processing
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informations
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way faster than before. As an example, there are many computer brands that offer a rapid processor that has the
ability
to process huge
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of data within just
some
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seconds. It shows the difference between previous inventions with the newest invention that the recent
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huge differences in having
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better quality.
In addition
,
due to
its advancements in the current time, almost all of the human tasks are becoming
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.
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better improvement is the result of
the advanced machines
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ability
to
finally
do the activities that are previously done by
human
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.
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, in the
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published
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there is a certain robot that has
overtake
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the human figure of the caregiver job. It is a robot that
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to provide
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caring needs of the elderly, which was
before
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being done by
human
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,
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until the robot
had
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arrived and took over the task. In conclusion, the role of
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in daily
task
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is fading
by
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time.
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is because of the
ability
of modern technology to
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on
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human needs, which shows a huge positive impact because it might be lowering people's role in doing tasks.
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