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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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The tables inform the audience about the
sales
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 of fairtrade goods
such
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 as coffee and banana in
years
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the years
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 1999 and 2004 in 5 European
countries
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. These
countries
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 are
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UK
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the UK
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,
Switzerland
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, Denmark, Belgium, and Sweden.
Overall
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, the
countries
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 with
highest
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the highest
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sales
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for
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of
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 coffee in 1999 and 2004
was
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were
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Switzerland
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 and
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UK
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the UK
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, respectively.
Switzerland
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also
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 had the greatest number of
sales
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 for
fairtrade-labelled
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fair trade-labelled
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 bananas in both 1999 and 2004. On the one hand, in 1999,
Switzerland
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 was the leading coffee seller with
sales
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 of £3
million
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,
however
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; in 2004
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UK
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the UK
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 surpassed it by having
sales
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 worth £20
million
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. Out of all the 5
countries
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,
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UK
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the UK
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 and Belgium experienced
dramatic
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a dramatic
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 shift in the volume of
sales
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 as the amount rose from 1.5 and 1 in 1999 to 20 and 17 in 2004, respectively.
Apart from
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this
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,
sales
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 for
Switzerland
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 doubled in 2004 and
countries
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 like Denmark and Sweden witnessed only a slight rise.
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, one common thing in all the
countries
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 was the increase
of
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in
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sales
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 in 2004.
On the other hand
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,
Switzerland
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 had a sale of £15
million
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 in 1999 for fairtrade-labelled bananas and it rose colossally in 2004 to an astonishing £47
million
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.
Sales
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 of
countries
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 like
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UK
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the UK
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 and Belgium in 2004
was
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were
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 5 times
than
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apply
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that in 1999.
Contrastingly
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, Sweden saw a decrease from 1.8 in 1999 to £1
million
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 in 2004,
while
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 Denmark's figures
also
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 dropped from 2 to £0.9
million
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 during the same period.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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