The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
The tables inform the audience about the
sales
of fairtrade goods
such
as coffee and banana in
years
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the years
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1999 and 2004 in 5 European
countries
. These
countries
are
UK
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the UK
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,
Switzerland
, Denmark, Belgium, and Sweden.
Overall
, the
countries
with
highest
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the highest
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sales
for
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of
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coffee in 1999 and 2004
was
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were
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Switzerland
and
UK
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the UK
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, respectively.
Switzerland
also
had the greatest number of
sales
for
fairtrade-labelled
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fair trade-labelled
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bananas in both 1999 and 2004. On the one hand, in 1999,
Switzerland
was the leading coffee seller with
sales
of £3
million
,
however
; in 2004
UK
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the UK
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surpassed it by having
sales
worth £20
million
. Out of all the 5
countries
,
UK
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the UK
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and Belgium experienced
dramatic
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a dramatic
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shift in the volume of
sales
as the amount rose from 1.5 and 1 in 1999 to 20 and 17 in 2004, respectively.
Apart from
this
,
sales
for
Switzerland
doubled in 2004 and
countries
like Denmark and Sweden witnessed only a slight rise.
However
, one common thing in all the
countries
was the increase
of
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in
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sales
in 2004.
On the other hand
,
Switzerland
had a sale of £15
million
in 1999 for fairtrade-labelled bananas and it rose colossally in 2004 to an astonishing £47
million
.
Sales
of
countries
like
UK
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the UK
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and Belgium in 2004
was
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were
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5 times
than
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apply
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that in 1999.
Contrastingly
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, Sweden saw a decrease from 1.8 in 1999 to £1
million
in 2004,
while
Denmark's figures
also
dropped from 2 to £0.9
million
during the same period.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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