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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the percentages of
illiteracy
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 around the world by region and by gender from the previous year.
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, it was estimated that the percentage of
illiteracy
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 among
females
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 was bigger than
males
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 in any region. As the bar chart shows, in developed countries and
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Caribean
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, there were
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 differences
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illiteracy
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 rates between
females
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 and
males
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. In developed countries, it was accounted that around 2% of
females
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 experienced
illteracy
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illiteracy
literacy
while
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 among
males
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 it was only nearly 1%. Meanwhile, in American Latin, it was estimated that about 12% of
females
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 witnessed
illteracy
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illiteracy
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 it was only 10% of
males
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 experienced
illiteracy
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.
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, in East Asia, Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab states, and South Asia, the
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comparative
 number of
illiteracy
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 between
feamles
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females
 and
males
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 significant. It was estimated the percentage of
illiteracy
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 among
females
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were
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 20%, around 48%, about 52%, and nearly 56%, respectively.
While
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 among
males
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, it was accounted that the percentages of the inability
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 read and write were about 8%, around 31%, nearly 30%, and around 34%, respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, females, males with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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