The map below shows three possible locations for a leisure center. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
This
is a map that shows the possible area
for a public leisure center
. Each Change the spelling
centre
area
has its own features where
will be discussed in the following paragraphs below.
First and foremost, starting with the Correct word choice
which
west
Replace the word
western
area
(C) is the most different between
the other two. Change preposition
from
This
is because it is dominated by tree
which become Fix the agreement mistake
trees
the
society's Correct article usage
apply
lung
as Fix the agreement mistake
lungs
it
Correct pronoun usage
they
contains
Correct subject-verb agreement
contain
lot
of oxygen for Add an article
a lot
public
. More than that, Add an article
the public
this
area
is also
kind of secluded and difficult tobe
accessed by Correct your spelling
to be
citizen
as it doesn't connect with the main road.
Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
On the other hand
, the city which become
the urban Wrong verb form
became
metroplitan
Correct your spelling
metropolitan
area
is located in the center
of the map. It is obvious that Change the spelling
centre
this
location is the most strategist
and likely Replace the word
strategic
have
more Correct subject-verb agreement
has
opportunity
to be visited by people especially those who like to stay in tall buildings as Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
this
place has many of it
.
Correct pronoun usage
them
The
Correct article usage
Last
last
but not least is the factory area
where
is located Correct word choice
which
on
the east. Change preposition
in
This
specific area
is not only obviously a
highly populated by workers, but Correct article usage
apply
also
an industrial place that makes the whole section is
busy from day to day Unnecessary verb
apply
as a result
from
producing stuff.Change preposition
of
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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