The given bar chart illustrates how many males and females played six different sports in English cities during 2012.

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The chart below shows many categories of sports that men and women played in English countries in 2012.

Overall

, for boys football,

tennis

and swimming are the most played sports,

while

a small amount of them preferred cycling, badminton and hockey. For girls swimming,badminton and

tennis

are the most popular among them in order, with a small number liking cycling, football and hockey. The number of males are playing.football is the highest one in all games and compared with girls , boys was 60 which it's nearly tripled for women.

Also

,more ladies liked to swim than gentlemen by 50 and over 40 respectively.

Tennis

was more common among men than girls in 2012 with almost 13 the difference between both. Badminton was the opposite in numbers to

tennis

with 40 and 30 in order to males and females.

However

, Cycling are less desired game in 2012 in both genders.

Also

, adult males were used to cycle about 37

while

ladies

just

Add a missing verb

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20. Hockey was undesirable with less than 20 and almost 10 gentlemen and daughters respectively.

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