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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar graph presents estimated the percentage of world
illiteracy
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 by gender in six different regions for the
last
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 year.
Overall
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, South
Asia
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was
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had
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 the most
illiteracy
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area
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areas
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in
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apply
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both
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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while
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 Developed Countries had the
least
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lowest
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 rates of
illiteracy
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. As we can see from the chart, South
Asia
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became
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has
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 the largest
illiteracy
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 both for
men
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 and
women
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 at about 34% and approximately
at
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apply
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55%. Arab States
was
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had
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 the second highest inability to read at more than 50% for
men
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 and around 20% less for
the
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apply
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women
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 followed by
Sub Saharan
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Sub-Saharan
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 Africa for
female
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females
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 and
male
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males
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 at just below 50% and just above 30%, respectively.
On the other hand
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,
three
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the three
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 regions with the most literacy are Developed Countries, American/Caribbean, and East
Asia
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/Oceania. It is most likely for the citizens in Developed Countries
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to read because the number of
illiteracy
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 was below 5% for both
men
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 and
women
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while
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 for the American/Caribbean was around 10%.
Women
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 in East
Asia
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/Oceania had more than double
number
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the number
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 compared to
men
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 at 20%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, asia, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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