The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar graph presents estimated the percentage of world
illiteracy
by gender in six different regions for the
last
year.
Overall
, South
Asia
was
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the most
illiteracy
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both
male
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and
female
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females
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while
Developed Countries had the
least
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rates of
illiteracy
. As we can see from the chart, South
Asia
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the largest
illiteracy
both for
men
and
women
at about 34% and approximately
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55%. Arab States
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the second highest inability to read at more than 50% for
men
and around 20% less for
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women
followed by
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Africa for
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and
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at just below 50% and just above 30%, respectively.
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regions with the most literacy are Developed Countries, American/Caribbean, and East
Asia
/Oceania. It is most likely for the citizens in Developed Countries
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to read because the number of
illiteracy
was below 5% for both
men
and
women
while
for the American/Caribbean was around 10%.
Women
in East
Asia
/Oceania had more than double
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compared to
men
at 20%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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