Many students like to get involved in extra- curricular activities at university such as social clubs and sports. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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tend to attend extra
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. Most universities
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as
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training and social
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often tend to attend these
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because they can
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nurturing their body and knowledge, which are advantages of attending these
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neglect their main classes, which are their main purpose
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spending their valuable time
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other social and
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.
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essay will discuss both sides with supporting examples. Extra
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are
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chance to meet different people and share their studying or social experiences with others. Attending
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sport club
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helps us to improve our physics which is one of
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is because active movement or exercise
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our brain development which is good for memorizing or studying something. There are
may
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advantages
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of doing exercise or
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studying.
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three times a week gym, are well resulted on their exams.
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should attend
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want to go
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because they can share their social experiences and thoughts with others which are affected to improve their background knowledge and expand their view of lenses.
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of attending these
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or
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they may broaden their networking, which would be helpful for finding jobs after graduating
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prefer to attend these
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, but striking
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studying and attending extra
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should be
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, despite leisure
ativities
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sports
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and social
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benefit
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our body and general knowledge, sometimes these
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to
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is because some
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those extra-curricular
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, and spend more time
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them rather than studying. These extra
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may seem easier and
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rather than studying at
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main purpose of why they
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the university.
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and doing
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are good
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physics and give
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expanding
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which would be necessary for seeking
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,
this
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phenomenon can
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mainly should focus on their main subjects
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interpersonal skills
  • teamwork
  • networking
  • time management
  • physical fitness
  • stress reduction
  • commitment
  • diverse interests
  • distraction
  • academic performance
  • overcommitment
  • burnout
  • financial strain
  • exclusivity
  • discrimination
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