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Some people believe that the main purpose of schools is to turn children into good citizens and workers instead of benefitting them individually. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #purpose #schools #children #citizens #workers
There is
belief
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 that says "The main purpose of
schools
 is to turn children into good
citizens
 and workers
instead
 of benefitting them individually". I mostly agree
to
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this
 statement. A
school
teachs
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teaches
teacher
 not only an academic lesson but
also
 a social lesson to correct
students
' conduct.
Moreover
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 almost all
school
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schools
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 have similar lessons, so
students
 will grow up to be
same
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the same
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 good adults. But maybe there are some places that are not similar to others. First of all, In every
school
, they teach general academic subjects
such
 as
Math
, Science, English
and
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etc.
In addition
 to these subjects, there are lessons
intented
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intended
 to make the
students
 become responsible
citizens
 of the society.
For example
, social studies or law studies
that
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teach
students
 what they should and should not do. And that they will
recieve
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receive
 punishment if they do something wrong.
Also
, when
students
spending
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 their time in
schools
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school
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, they will learn how to behave and interact with each other.
School
disciplinary
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 is
also
 the way to guide children to the good path.
Furthermore
,
because
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every
school
 have the same
standard
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standards
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 for the graduated
students
. Their curriculums tend to be the same. And that has a negative effect on the student. Because everyone has his own talent. Teaching
students
 the same thing doesn't mean that
thay
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they
 will get equal
score
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scores
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. To illustrate, when someone who's good at drawing and someone who's good at
Math
 study Algebra together, he who excels at
Math
 will do better. But, does
this
 mean that
students
 who get bad grades are bad
student
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students
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? No, they may be bad at
Math
 but they have something they
good
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are good
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 at too. Unfortunately
that
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their capabilities have to be measured with
an
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only
same
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the same
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 standard.
However
, some
schools
 may not be like the others. There are a few
schools
 whose intent
are
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is
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 not just to bring up their student to be good people but
encourage
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to encourage
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 them to be the best version of themself. These
schools
 still have the same
requirement
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requirements
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 for their
students
 to meet. but they support things that are not in the requirement too. To give examples, some
schools
 permit
students
 to join clubs of their interests after studying periods,
such
 as
,
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apply
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 art club, music club and sports club.
Furthermore
, these
schools
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school's
schools'
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curriculum
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curricula
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 may not
limit
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 to just science
course
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courses
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 and social studies
course
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courses
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. They have
other
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another course
other courses
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course
 like literature, management and art
course
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courses
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 too. To sum it up, every
school
 have similar ways of teaching and preparing their
students
 to become good
citizens
 and workers of the societies. Yet, they teach the same things to every
students
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student
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, despite the fact that everyone is unique and has his own way of learning.
Therefore
, you could say that
this
 way of teaching doesn't benefit their
students
 individually. That's why
i
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I
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 agree with
this
 statement.
However
, there might be some
schools
 that do it differently.
While
 keeping the standards like other
schools
, they support their
students
 individually too.
For their
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intentions
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intention
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that
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is that
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students
 will grow up not only to be good
citizens
,
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 but
also
 to be themself that they dream of.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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