The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph depicts the spending patterns of individuals from various
age
groups in the United Kingdom across three different categories of interest in the year 2004..
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Overall
, it is observe
that the preference for beverages was highest among individuals above the Change the verb form
is observed
age
of 76. While
,
the entertainment sector seems to be more popular among people in the Remove the comma
apply
age
group
of 61 to 75.
In the given graph, Super seniors (76+) spent the most 22% of
food and drink and less in Change preposition
on
resturant
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restaurant
restaurants
hotel
around 8% , followed by (Fix the agreement mistake
hotels
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the 61
age
group
20% and minimul
in respective sectors and maximum Correct your spelling
minimal
in
entertainment nearly 23%. Change preposition
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While
the other age
group
31-45 and 46-60 expend ther
earning's 12 Correct your spelling
their
percent
in Change the spelling
per cent
resturant
and hotel respectively.
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restaurant
Further
, It seems that the younger generation spends less than 15% of their earnings on restaurants, while
those in the age
group
of 31-45 prefer to spend more on snacks and drinks as compared to those under 30, which is approximately 13%. Interestingly, entertainment is not a popular choice for either age
group
, with only 8% and 9% being spent on it, respectively.Submitted by shubhashish.bobby on
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