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Band 2.5

You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel.

#hotel #home #papers
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Dear
sir
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 or
madam
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Madam
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, I am writing
to
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this
 letter to inform you
to
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that
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 our
office
staff
leavs
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leaves
leave
 their job and their
last
 day in the
office
 is 17th October 2023. So I request to
your
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you
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 we are arranged their
ferwell
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farewell
party
in
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on
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 their
last
 day. Our
office
staff
 and my friend and
my
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apply
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colleagues
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colleague
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 his name is Mehul Chaudhari
and
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his
Id
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ID
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 no is 1234
leaves
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left
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 their job and going
to
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abroad for his higher education in London (UK). His
last
 working day
in
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is
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 17th October 2023 and we are
arrenge
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arrange
surprise
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a surprise
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party
 for him. We are
arrenge
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arrange
 the
party
 before his leaving the job and one suitable date and time. So we
haave decaed
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have decided
 for the
party
in
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on
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 Sunday 1st October 2023 and the time is in the evening
7:30
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at 7,30
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 PM in
galaxy hotel
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Galaxy Hotel
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 4th floor. We are
invaited
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invited
 to all
staff
 and
manger
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manager
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 and our boss. Our meal is
strated
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started
shof
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shop
derink
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drink
 and
rostaed
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roasted
rostered
 paneer and the main
couse
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cause
course
 is some
chainse
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Chinese
chains
 food and
lasr
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last
laser
disart
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desert
. We are
arrenge
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arrange
 dance
party
also
. Our
party
finised
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finishes
in
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at
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 11 o’clock
in
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at
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the
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apply
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night. I hope you and our
office
 boss and all manager
coming
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come
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 to
this
party
 and enjoy and
gave
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give
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blasing
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blessing
blasting
 to our
office
staff
forthis
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for this
 future.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 faithfully, Parth
patel
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Patel
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task response
The task was to write a letter reporting the loss of important papers at a hotel, but the content of the letter was unrelated to the task, thereby not fulfilling the actual assignment. Focus on addressing the given task and ensure that the letter's subject matter is relevant to the scenario presented in the task.
coherence cohesion
The letter displays limited coherence and cohesion. The logical structure is weakened by inconsistent topic development and the frequent shifting of focus. The introduction and conclusion are present but are not effectively delineated. Main ideas are only partially supported, often lacking detail and clarity. To improve, organize your ideas into clear paragraphs, each with a central topic, and use cohesive devices to connect ideas logically.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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