You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel.

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Dear

sir

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madam

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, I am writing

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this

letter to inform you

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that

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our

office

staff

leavs

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leaves

leave

their job and their

last

day in the

office

is 17th October 2023. So I request to

your

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we are arranged their

ferwell

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farewell

party

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their

last

day. Our

office

staff

and my friend and

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apply

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colleagues

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his name is Mehul Chaudhari

and

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his

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no is 1234

leaves

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left

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their job and going

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abroad for his higher education in London (UK). His

last

working day

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17th October 2023 and we are

arrenge

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arrange

surprise

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party

for him. We are

arrenge

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arrange

the

party

before his leaving the job and one suitable date and time. So we

haave decaed

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have decided

for the

party

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Sunday 1st October 2023 and the time is in the evening

7:30

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at 7,30

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PM in

galaxy hotel

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Galaxy Hotel

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4th floor. We are

invaited

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invited

to all

staff

and

manger

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manager

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and our boss. Our meal is

strated

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started

shof

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shop

derink

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drink

and

rostaed

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roasted

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paneer and the main

couse

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cause

course

is some

chainse

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Chinese

chains

food and

lasr

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last

laser

disart

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desert

. We are

arrenge

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arrange

dance

party

also

. Our

party

finised

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finishes

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11 o’clock

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the

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night. I hope you and our

office

boss and all manager

coming

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this

party

and enjoy and

gave

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give

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blasing

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blessing

blasting

to our

office

staff

forthis

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for this

future.

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Your

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faithfully, Parth

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The task was to write a letter reporting the loss of important papers at a hotel, but the content of the letter was unrelated to the task, thereby not fulfilling the actual assignment. Focus on addressing the given task and ensure that the letter's subject matter is relevant to the scenario presented in the task.

coherence cohesion

The letter displays limited coherence and cohesion. The logical structure is weakened by inconsistent topic development and the frequent shifting of focus. The introduction and conclusion are present but are not effectively delineated. Main ideas are only partially supported, often lacking detail and clarity. To improve, organize your ideas into clear paragraphs, each with a central topic, and use cohesive devices to connect ideas logically.

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 2 - Example
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Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
44Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

213 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel.

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