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percentage

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of travel,

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fiction, biography ,

children

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children's

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and some

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others

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other

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books

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that have

sold

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been sold

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a bookseller

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bookseller

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booksellers

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from 1972 to 2012 ,

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it can be seen that

adult

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books

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have been selling more than other

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over

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that

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however,

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travel

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welll

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well

as biography

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were selling at the lowest level . regards to that type of

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that sold more than

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namely,

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book

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books

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and

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books

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some

kind

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of other

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as well .

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1972

adult

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books

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have

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sold by %20

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which

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number increased to %25

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in 1992

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in 2012

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vendors sold

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the adult

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book

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, children

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a bookstore

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re by %20 in 1972 which

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amount

in 1992 and 2019 rose steadily to %22 in 1992 and %25 in 2012

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more individuals sold some

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books

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by %25 in 1972

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increased

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dramatic decline in the market of that

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ks .

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others

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books

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as travel

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oks and

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biography

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are

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book

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sold b

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in buying

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d to buy that

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by %20 pers

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per cent

entage in 1972 and %22 in 199

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hey were more and more read that

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in 2012 by %25 .

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biography

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sold less than

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, adult, others, books, book with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
5
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

232 words

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The pie charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by a booksellere between 1972 and 2012

Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possibl. While others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. Discuss both views and give your opinio.

It can be difficult for small local shops to compete with large supermarkets and with on-line shops. How does this affect local communities? What could be done to improve this situation?

some people say that the bicycle is a good means of transport. Others say that the bicycle has many disadvantages. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advatantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?