The pie charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by a booksellere between 1972 and 2012

The pie charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by a booksellere between 1972 and 2012
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of travel,
adult
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fiction, biography ,
children
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children's

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and some
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others
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other

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books
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that have
sold
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been sold

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by
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a bookseller
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a bookseller

The noun phrase bookseller seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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bookseller
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booksellers
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from 1972 to 2012 ,
overall
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it can be seen that
adult
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books
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have been selling more than other
books
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over
thar
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that

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period ,
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however
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however,

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase however. Consider adding a comma.

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travel
books
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as
welll
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well

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as biography
books
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were selling at the lowest level . regards to that type of
book
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that sold more than
others
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namely,
adult
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book
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books

It seems that book may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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and
children
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children's

It seems that this noun form may be incorrect.

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books
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Correct word choice
and

It seems that conjunction use may be incorrect here.

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some
kind
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kinds

It seems that kind may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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of other
books
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as well .
in
Capitalize word
In

The word in should be capitalized in this context.

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1972
adult
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books
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have
Unnecessary verb
apply

The verb have appears to be unnecessary here.

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sold by %20
percentage
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which
this
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number increased to %25
percentage
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in 1992
moreover
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in 2012
book
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vendors sold
a la
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large

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rg number o
f
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the adult
an adult

The noun phrase adult book seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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adult
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book
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by % 45
percentage
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,
moreover
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, children
books
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was selling i
n booksto
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a bookstore
the bookstore

The noun phrase bookstore seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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re by %20 in 1972 which
thi
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s amout
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amount

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in 1992 and 2019 rose steadily to %22 in 1992 and %25 in 2012
. futher
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furthermore

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more individuals sold some
others
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books
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by %25 in 1972
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increased

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then
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inceased to %25 byt
in 20
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their

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12 t
her was
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a dramatic
the dramatic

The noun phrase dramatic decline seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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dramatic decline in the market of that
boo
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ks .
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Other

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others
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books
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such
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as travel
bo
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oks and
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biography

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biogap
hy
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are

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book
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s
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in

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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sold b
y smal
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numbers

It seems that number may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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l numb
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the
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the

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er
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the
over tha timefr
ames j
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They

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uvenalis were int
ereste
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in buying

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d to buy that
book
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by %20 pers
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per cent

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entage in 1972 and %22 in 199
2 t
Verb problem
read

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hey were more and more read that
books
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in 2012 by %25 .
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Linking Words
although
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biography

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bigraphy
books
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sold less than
others
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by
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, adult, others, books, book with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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