The pie charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by a booksellere between 1972 and 2012

The pie charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by a booksellere between 1972 and 2012
the pie charts give us information about the
percentage
of travel,
adult
fiction, biography ,
children
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and some
others
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other
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books
that have
sold
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been sold
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by
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a bookseller
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bookseller
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from 1972 to 2012 ,
overall
it can be seen that
adult
books
have been selling more than other
books
over
thar
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that
period ,
however
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travel
books
as
welll
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well
as biography
books
were selling at the lowest level . regards to that type of
book
that sold more than
others
namely,
adult
book
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books
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and
children
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books
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some
kind
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of other
books
as well .
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1972
adult
books
have
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sold by %20
percentage
which
this
number increased to %25
percentage
in 1992
moreover
in 2012
book
vendors sold
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large
rg number o
f
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the adult
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adult
book
by % 45
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,
moreover
, children
books
was selling i
n booksto
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re by %20 in 1972 which
thi
s amout
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amount
in 1992 and 2019 rose steadily to %22 in 1992 and %25 in 2012
. futher
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furthermore
more individuals sold some
others
books
by %25 in 1972
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increased
then
inceased to %25 byt
in 20
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their
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her was
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dramatic decline in the market of that
boo
ks .
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others
books
such
as travel
bo
oks and
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biography
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hy
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book
s
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sold b
y smal
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the
er
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uvenalis were int
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d to buy that
book
by %20 pers
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per cent
entage in 1972 and %22 in 199
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hey were more and more read that
books
in 2012 by %25 .
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sold less than
others
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