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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts show information about the
british
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British
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 school spending every year from 1981, 1991 and 2001.
Overall
, it is noticeable that teachers' salaries
is
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are
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top
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the top
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 accounts
to
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for
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largest
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the largest
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 expenditure. Mostly school spending refers to
teachers
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teachers'
teacher's
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 salaries in 1981 which
followed
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was followed
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 by a sudden increase
percentage
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in percentage
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into
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to
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 50% in 1991. Resources e.g books and furniture & equipment have
similar
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a similar
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 proportion namely 15%.
However
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However,
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 in 1991, resources requirements rose
into
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by
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 20%
whereas
 furniture and equipment decreased by 10%.
Additionally
, Other outworker's salaries decline from 28% into 22%.
Lastly
,
the
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apply
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insurance stood
only
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at only
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 2% which becomes
aspect
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the aspect
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requires
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that requires
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 the least expenditure in school need. The insurance did not have
a significant changes
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significant changes
a significant change
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, which is proven by the fact there is only
1
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a 1
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% increase from 1981 to 1991.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Annual spending
  • Expenditure categories
  • Allocation
  • Trend analysis
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Budget allocation strategy
  • Inflation-adjusted
  • Future implications
  • Educational institutions
  • Technological resources
  • Maintenance and operations
  • Comparative analysis
  • Fiscal management
  • Resource allocation
  • Strategic planning
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