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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton and planned future development of the site. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton and planned future development of the site. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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These maps
illustrates
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illustrate
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 an industrial area in the city of Norbiton and
planned
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the planned
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 future development of the site.
According to
 the maps, the changes will be dramatic, it will become more residential,
moreover
, there will be
playground
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playgrounds
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, shops, etcetera. As it evident from the maps, there are will be new roads in
north-west
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the north-west
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, north till the opposite
side
 of
river
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the river
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 ban,
in addition
,
little
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the little
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 circled road will be added in the south
side
 of the area.
Furthermore
, all factories will be knocked down and
instead
of
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apply
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apply
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it
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it,
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 there will be a school, shops, houses,
playground
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a playground
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 and a medical centre. On the bank where
is
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only farmland is located now,
will
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there will
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 be
a
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apply
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residential housing and other land will
be remain
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remain
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 as farmland. Meanwhile,
on
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apply
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the
side
 where manufactories are installed, will be completely changed. On the western
side
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side,
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 two houses will be constructed.
In contrast
, 3 housings will be built on the east.
Whereas
, on the north
side
 you will be able to see the
last
 house. As for
a
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 school, it will be on the end of the eastern road,
while
 the playground will be opened up between 2 houses, a bit western the school. Turning to the shops, they
are
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apply
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will be on the
south-west
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southwest
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side
 and
medical
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the medical
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 centre will be located on
shops’
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the shops’
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 right
side
.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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