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The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods, rice, wheat and maize, by People in four different countries.

The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods, rice, wheat and maize, by People in four different countries.
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The table provides details about the amount of
calories
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 that people from
four
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 different
countries
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 consume on a daily basis from different foods.
Overall
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, Egypt has the highest daily calorie
consumption
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 among the
four
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countries
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.
Furthermore
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, the primary contributor to calorie intake in Cambodia is the
consumption
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 of
rice
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.
To begin
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 with, out of the
four
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countries
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, Egyptians consume the highest amount of
calories
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,
along with
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 the highest expenditure of wheat (1095
calories
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/
day
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). Their
consumption
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 of
rice
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 and maize is approximately half of their wheat intake which is at 501
calories
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/
day
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 and 578
calories
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/
day
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, respectively.
On the other hand
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, Poland has the lowest caloric intake among the
four
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countries
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, with a daily utilization of 865
calories
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 from wheat and a mere 19
calories
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 from
rice
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.
In addition
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, The patterns of caloric
consumption
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 in Mexico and Cambodia exhibit notable differences, with Mexicans getting most of their
calories
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 from maize (1083
calories
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/
day
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),
while
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 Canadians consume the majority of their
calories
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 from
rice
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 (1445
calories
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/
day
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)

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Vocabulary: Replace the words calories, four, countries, consumption, rice, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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