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The table below shows the production of potatoes, cabbage and onions in five countries in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The table below shows the production of potatoes, cabbage and onions in five countries in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The table below illustrates the production of three vegetables which are
Potatoes
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 and Cabbage
as well as
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 Onions.
Moreover
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,these plants were produced in five European countries and the unit of measurement is in million tonnes.
Overall
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, Ireland recorded the lowest statistics among all the nations
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 in all the three plants Whilst,China
have
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 got the highest output of all the crops that were grown. The
Potatoes
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 that were produced in
Spain
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 were 2 million tonnes and the total number was the least
comparing
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compared
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 with other countries
who
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also
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 grew
Potatoes
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Furthermore
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,There were no Onions that were obtained in
Spain
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.
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,China produced more Cabbages than Russia and Brazil.Again,The tonnes
for
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Potatoes
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 in China were large as compared to Russia and Brazil.
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, Ireland had more Onions than
Spain
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whereas
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,
Spain
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 had more Cabbage than Ireland.
Besides
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,
Potatoes
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 grown in
lreland
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Ireland
 were over than the amount produced in
Spain
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words potatoes, spain with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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