There have been several complaints about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved. Write a letter to your manager, in your letter: describe the complaints that have been made say why the reception area is important suggest how the reception area could be improved
Dear Mr. Brown,
I am writing with regard to your survey about my opinions to improve the
reception
area
.
We receive high
number of complaints about Change the article
a high
the high
lack
of enough space Correct article usage
the lack
at
our Change preposition
in
reception
area
every single day. Needless to say, we are dealing with huge
number of visitors every day, Change the article
a huge
the huge
hence
, the lack of rooms for them in our reception
area
have
Change the verb form
has
strong
negative impact on their first impression Add an article
a strong
from
our company.
Change preposition
of
Moreover
, this
area
is the first place which every folks
face Change to a singular noun
folk
to
when they arrive here. Indeed, we are able to build positive impacts in our Change preposition
apply
costumer’s
Change noun form
customers’
mind
by Fix the agreement mistake
minds
improve
the facilities, Change the verb form
improving
such
as enough seats and good air condition
, in the Wrong verb form
conditioning
area
.
I believe we will manage to increase the space by adding the small kitchen behind the reception
area
to it. We should also
change the furniture and order brand new comfortable couches and a new air-conditioner to improve it.
Please feel free if you require further
information.
Yours sincerely
AliSubmitted by ali on
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coherence cohesion
The letter should begin with a clear purpose statement and each paragraph should focus on a single main idea. Ensure that paragraphs are well-developed with clear topic sentences and supporting details.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing conventions of a formal letter have been observed, but could be improved with less casual language and more conventional expressions.
task achievement
Make sure to directly address all parts of the task prompt. While the complaints have been mentioned, more specific details about the types of complaints received would strengthen the response.
task achievement
Maintain a formal tone throughout the letter. Avoid using contractions and informal language. Use formal phrases and clarify points with detailed explanations.