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Band 4.5

Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In the current scenario, it is a debatable issue that the
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 trend is significantly increasing.
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, many people say it should be legal action on it and others are the opposite way.
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 explanations and my opinion supports that it should be a legal way to some extent reasons. On one side, Many state that it is a safe thing to have an
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 before the growth of the baby's structure in the woman's womb.
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 is because doctors can save the life of a woman if they are aware of any hierarchical disease.
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, a recent article claims that many teenagers who had an
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 issue and died
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 having legal formalities procedures, On the flip side, opponents said that
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 should not be legal because it leads to an increase in the world's population and it is an ethical reason to birth a baby as he or she can change the country's monopoly in the future.
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,
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 is a valid reason to protest and share thoughts with the nation against the
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 topic.
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, there were no protests mentioned in any government histories against
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 public place. In conclusion, it is above discussed that an
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 can lead to
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health problems and some of the
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 might be
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death.
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, every
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 two sides so my view supports the legal way, where the majority decision is taken by the authority.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure your essay has a clear structure, consisting of an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Use cohesive devices and appropriate transition phrases to connect ideas effectively.
coherence cohesion
The introduction should present the topic and clearly state your position or provide an outline of the discussion to follow.
coherence cohesion
Main points should be expanded with adequate support, such as explanations, examples, and arguments that are relevant to the topic. Each main point should have a clear central idea.
task achievement
Fully address all parts of the task, providing a balanced discussion of both views and a clear personal stance. Ideas and arguments should be relevant and supported by evidence.
task achievement
Ideas should be developed in a way that is easy to understand, avoiding overly complex sentence structures or ideas that could confuse the reader. Clarity will contribute to better task achievement.
task achievement
Make use of concrete and contextually appropriate examples to illustrate and support your arguments. Avoid vague or generic statements when providing evidence for your points.
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