The word of work is rapidly changing. Employees cannot depend on having the same work or same work condition in life. Discuss possible causes and suggest way to prepare for people to work in future.

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People apparently see the difference between the previous and new
carrier
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career
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opportunities and working conditions
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all over the world.
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, they do not need to depend on the same
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which they did earlier and
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to create their
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as a developing ladder. I will discuss the reasons for
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event and will give my opinion
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their working pathway in
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essay. To start with possible causes,
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workers
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preferences were changed
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new innovations.
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, nowadays employees seek new creations with advanced technology
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new
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challenges
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work. For
instrance
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instance
,
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aware
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on
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modern updates regarding
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career
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opportunities by analysing
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social media and other web
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platforms
and if they get a good chance to develop
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job
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jobs
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and skills, they will move to
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pathway despite
of
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hanging on the old one.
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, the expansion of needs
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them to not only do
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employment but
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to do
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a variety
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of
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job
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jobs
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together.
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, if the salary is not adequate for daily expenditures and lifestyle improvements, the staff will drop from the company to
aquire
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acquire
a high position with a
statisfying
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satisfying
income.
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, these changes are supported by the managers currently rather than past years. Regarding the preparation
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future
works
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, I still believe that people will do multiple works
rahter
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rather
than holding one
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for their
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own benefits
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benefits
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.
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, have to get some skills to manage the work
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as critical thinking ability,
problem solving
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pattern
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, fact analysis and quality
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.
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to say, they have to be prepared to face the challenges which will occur in future within the company.
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with the empowerment of artificial
interlligent
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intelligence
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technology, workers have to be up to
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and
enhace
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enhance
their knowledge and skills to handle the events related to their employment. In conclusion,
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advancement
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the advancement
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of technology, changes in the preferences of
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job
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jobs
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and increased value of people's needs,
workers
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dependency on the same
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will
be reduce
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and they will develop the carrier with new pathways.
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, they have to be prepared for future changes with high responsibilities.
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