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Fossil fuels are essential for producing electricity, powering industry and fuelling transportation. However, one day we will reach a point when all the world’s fossil fuels have been depleted. How can we conserve these resources? What are some alternatives to fossil fuels?

There is no denying the fact that fossil
fuels
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 are the backbone of our universe.
This
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 essay will discuss how these resources could be conserved, and suggest some alternatives.
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 with, there are many ways and techniques that we can follow to save fossil fuel resources from being depleted rapidly.
Firstly
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, we should seriously work on increasing people's awareness of the importance of fossil
fuels
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.
In other words
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, people should be conscious
about
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 the universal problem which may face us in the near future if we do not improve our consumption habits.
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, we should concentrate our global efforts on inventing new techniques or new devices that do not operate completely
by
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on
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 fossil
fuels
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.
For example
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, in Japan, they are working on inventing a new version of vehicles that operates and charges partially on sunlight. In terms of the alternatives
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 fossil
fuels
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, the water could be a great option to generate energy. It is
also
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 possible to say that, in many countries, they have already used the power of running water to produce energy.
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, using wind would be an excellent competitive resource.
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, many countries,
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 as Dubai, utilize their skyscraper to build huge wind power generators. In conclusion, there are many possible ways to save and reduce the global consumption of fossil
fuels
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. It is
also
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 true that we already have a lot of competitive alternatives which we can rely on.
However
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, we should seriously focus on increasing
people
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 awareness to make them keen to minimize their daily
consumptions
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consumption
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 of these resources.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure you maintain a clear and logical structure throughout your essay. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea, and all sentences should connect to it. Your body paragraphs could be developed more coherently with clearer transitions and topic sentences that are directly related to the questions asked.
task achievement
Your essay responds to the task and provides a rationale for conservation alongside alternatives to fossil fuels. However, the recommendations and examples could be more developed. Use specific examples to strengthen your arguments, and make sure each paragraph contains a clear main idea and elaborates on it comprehensively.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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