Some people believe it is better to learn by themselves rather than with a teacher. Others prefer to learn with a teacher. Discuss both these approaches and give your own opinion about which is better.

A
teacher
is a motivator or guide for every
student
in their study life; they are teaching them to understand things in a better way. But other people believe that learning is better for themselves than for a
teacher
. And some are of the view that anyone cannot learn without a
teacher
; they will not get the right path
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future success. In my opinion, learning is essential for every
student
, and I want to discuss
this
from both points of view in
this
passage. On the one hand, a tutor gives them the right motivation and structured guidelines for
further
development. In the beginning, if a
teacher
is not able to give them
this
facility,
then
they cannot understand what is lacking behind them and what the difficulties are for adaptation.
Furthermore
, the whole system was changed worldwide
due to
the COVID-19 issue. We suffered for the tutor at every learning stage. For that reason, we realized the value of an educator in comparison to not having a
teacher
at all.
For example
, if a
student
wants to learn without guidance, they realise they have deficiencies in every stage of
this
expertise.
On the other hand
, some people believe that without a
teacher
, the teaching system will be flexible and cost-effective. They will be more conscious of learning and self-motivated for future development. Every
students
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they
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will take
this
subject as they have
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requirement
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and what is the
avility
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ability
they have on. If they are not dependable on
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teacher
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then
the cost will be short for
this
profession and they will be more aware
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financial
situation
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.
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, if they have
this
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flexibility
then
they will
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creative
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their own sector.
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, In China about two
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decades
before
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the learning cost and focused on
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development, afterward they
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strong in technology. In conclusion, teaching proficiency
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required for the
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school going
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and
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to
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for learning. It should be more effective for
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every
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life.
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Task Response
Task response was satisfactory but could improve by expanding on ideas and providing more in-depth analysis to fully address all parts of the prompt. Try to ensure that your opinion is clear and that you examine both views comprehensively before stating your position.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay lacked clarity and precision in some sentences, making it difficult to follow your argument. Strive for clear, concise language and well-structured sentences. Use a wide range of vocabulary and avoid repetition where possible to strengthen your writing.
Task Response
Back up your main points with specific examples. While your essay contains examples, they are somewhat vague and could be better detailed for stronger support of your arguments. Ensure the examples are directly relevant to the points you're making.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous learning
  • tailored approach
  • self-discipline
  • guidance
  • pedagogical expertise
  • accountability
  • cost-effectiveness
  • personalized attention
  • progress assessment
  • structured curriculum
  • motivational engagement
  • pedagogic dependency
  • methodological diversity
  • blended learning
  • cognitive development
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