Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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While
many
people
believe that advertising is highly successful
about
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convinging
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convincing
individuals to purchase things, others argue that
advartising
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advertising
is so commonplace in today's world
and
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that
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people
don't even recognise it.
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essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail,
along with
presenting my opinion.  On the one hand, nowadays,
advertisements
might have
big
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influence in different ways.
In other words
, companies might create
huge
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a huge
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impact by using various ways. Take,
for example
, in the film industry, a movie called Barbie which is a doll, created
huge
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a huge
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effect on
people
and company sales increased hugely only in a week.
Moreover
, another way can be using celebrities. Most of the celebrities have large followings and
therefore
, they might create big influence by promoting an item.
For instance
, Jack Harlow, a young
hiphop
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hip-hop
hip hop
star, has signed a deal with New Balance company and
as a result
, company revenue
rised
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rose
risen
raised
exceptionally.
However
, I believe that
advertisements
are too common and these examples are just exceptions.
On the other hand
, in
modern
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world,
advertisements
can be found everywhere.
This
is because technology has developed incredibly and
as a result
, it has become too easy for firms to promote their product.
For instance
,
in
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on
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every website, there are at least 4 or 5
advertisements
. Not only
in
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on
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websites, in internet videos and
in
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on
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televisions
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television
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too. In televisions, the
advertisements
are
too
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so
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frequent that
people
can't even watch what they want to watch.
As a consequence
,
people
are
too
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tired of
this
situation that they don't even bother to look at the product.
To conclude
, I believe that advertising is not successful because it has become too common and individuals
got
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tired of
this
situation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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