International tourism has become a huge industry in the world. Some people think that the problem caused by international tourism outweigh the benefits. To what extent do you agree? or disagree?
Globally, International tourism has become a popular
bussiness
which enables Correct your spelling
business
Correct article usage
the developing
developing
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development
the
economy in most countries. Change preposition
of the
However
there is a belief that it has many negative effects Add a comma
However,
to
the nation. I totally disagree with that view and will explain the reasons in Change preposition
on
this
essay.
Firstly
, tourism all around the world increases the economic growth of the country
which will facilitates
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facilitate
further
developments. For instance
, if the visitors from all around the world expand, the particular country
will recieve
international money which sometimes comes from developed regions. Correct your spelling
receive
As a result
, the savings of cental
banks will go high range which the government can use for Correct your spelling
central
development
of many divisions Correct article usage
the development
such
as tourism, education, health, transport etc. Therefore
, it gives
Verb problem
has
positive
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a positive
impacts
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impact
in
every department.
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on
Secondly
, the values, cultures and special places will be highlighted due to
the visitors who come across the oceans. That is
to say, people move around the places and explore the lifestyle pattern of other country
's citizens which they share in
social media. Change preposition
on
For example
, the followers can see the posts about the travel diaries and it will influence them to experience the same. Further
, cultural diversity will expand due to
international travelling which other societies can include as
a positive manner. Change preposition
in
Therefore
, rituals and values exhibit the significance of each country
.
However
, some of the local languages and rare cultural habits will be destroyed by practicing
Change the spelling
practising
cross cultural
rituals. To explain Add a hyphen
cross-cultural
this
, most of the young generation forget their mother tounge
nowadays and Correct your spelling
tongue
using
international languages Wrong verb form
use
due to
study purposes. Change preposition
for
As a result
, they are not aware on
their own cultural values.
In conclusion, despite the eradication of some local cultures, Change preposition
of
world wide
sightseeing brings more advantages locally Correct your spelling
worldwide
as well as
globally such
as economical
growth and showcasing lifestyle patterns of people which some societies can replace the old and improper cultural norms.Replace the word
economic
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