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Some people say it is important to keep your home and work place tidy with everything organized and in the correct places. What is your opinion about it?

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Many individuals believe that it is crucial to keep everything clean and in order at
residencial
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residential
 places and in offices.
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, from my
perspective
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 everyone should consider
this
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 practice mandatory because it will
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 them
on
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in
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 many stages of life in future. I am going to briefly discuss
this
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 in my forthcoming paragraphs with authentic examples to support my points of view. Some
people
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 like to keep every item in their household unstained and in
very
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a very
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organize
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 manner whether it belongs to
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kitchen
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the kitchen
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 or other areas. They believe that it will make their search for specific valuables easy in future.
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, sugar is
a
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an
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 item which person uses in their daily life routine. There are specific jars available in the market so that
one
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 can store them safely in the
kitchen
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.
People
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 normally put them on
kitchen
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shelfs
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shelves
shelf
 for easy access,
neverthless
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nevertheless
, they lost them in some other place.
One
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 illustration of
this
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 is someone
tooks
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took
 these utensils to another room so that they
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could
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 add more
sweetner
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sweetener
sweetness
in
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to
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 their coffee or tea. He/she ends up keeping them in
room
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the room
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 rather than putting
it
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them
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 back
to
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in
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kitchen
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the kitchen
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.
As a result
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,
kitchen
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 worker finds difficulties during their
work
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.
Furthermore
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, many folks
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 to keep their own tools at home to fix small issues. It is very important to organize these instruments in some safe and selected places.
Lets
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 suppose, some electronic item is not working and after fixing
this
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person
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the person
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 forgets to put these apparatus back to
whereever
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wherever
where ever
 they belong. They will face problems
while
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 finding it next
time
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 in case any
time
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 stops working.
Secondly
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, some
people
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 consider their
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work place
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workplace
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 as a second home. They spend half of their
time
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 at offices.
Therefore
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, they
likes
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like
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 to keep everything clean just like in houses.
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, office responsibilities include
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 of
files
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work
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. These folders
needs
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 to
be arrange
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be arranged
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 in
good
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 manner so that
one
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 can find them easily whenever they need
it
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them
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.
However
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,
person
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a person
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 can face some serious issues if they are not able to perceive them on
time
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. Because some bosses have anger issues
so
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apply
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they might end up firing their employees if they missed those important documents.
Besides
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, it
also
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 leaves
good
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a good
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 impression of a worker towards other colleagues.
To sum up
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, arranging everything either at
house
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the house
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 or
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work place
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workplace
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 is important
according to
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people
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people's
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 points of view. In my opinion,
one
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 should
cosider
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consider
 that practice as a mandatory step in their life. Because it has
lot
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a lot
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 of benefits. It not only helps them in their daily
work
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 routine but
also
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 develops
sense
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a sense
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 of
resposibility
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responsibility
 among them.

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task response
The essay presents a general response to the prompt with a thesis statement and a conclusion, but the argument is not fully developed. To improve, ensure that your opinion is stated clearly in the introduction and is reinforced throughout the essay. Your main points should directly support your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
The paragraphing of the essay is generally clear, but transitions between ideas could be smoother. It is crucial to use a wider range of cohesive devices such as linking words and pronouns to clarify the relationships between ideas and paragraphs. Also, try to express your ideas more precisely to enhance the logical flow of information.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Efficiency
  • Productivity
  • Organized
  • Clutter-free
  • Hygiene
  • Allergens
  • Creativity
  • Minimalist
  • Professionalism
  • Environmental consciousness
  • Sustainability
  • Calm
  • Time management
  • Aesthetically pleasing
  • Attention to detail
  • Economic
  • Impression
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