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the maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. summarize the information and make comparison. write 150 words.

the maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. summarize the information and make comparison. write 150 words.
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These maps depict the developments that will be constructed in the Norbiton manufacturing region.
Overall
, it can be seen that all factories are redeveloped into new buildings for different purposes.
According to
 what is shown, in the old map, a river is located along the northern side of the town, a farmland is adjacent to the outer side of the river. But, in the centre of the city, eight factories are situated, which are close to each other, so
this
 region is called
industrial
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an industrial
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area
. Regarding
to
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the new plan, which will be implemented later, a part of the farmland will be turned into a housing
area
, and a bridge will be established over the river to make a way to the middle of the town.
In addition
, all factories will be demolished, so six residential
area
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 will be built inside the city.
Also
, other buildings will be set up to introduce various services to the population
such
 as
school
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, malls, and hospitals.
To sum up
, we could say that the industrial
area
 will be destructed completely in order to
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convert
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 it to a housing region.
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