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Some people say it is important to keep your home and work place tidy with everything organized and in the correct places. What is your opinion about it?

Nowadays, most people usually spend their time
with
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work
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.
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, important to keep your
home
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 and
work
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places
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keep
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clean and tidy with everything organized and in the correct
places
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. I completely agree with
this
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 statement.
Beacuse
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Because
 when we
arrived
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 at
home
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 or somewhere with
cluttered
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the cluttered
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 situation,
it's
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 can
make
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add to
the
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 bad mood.
Firstly
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, we should
to
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mantain
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maintain
 cleanliness both at
home
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or
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and
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the
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work
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workplace
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place
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. We
also
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to
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spruce up
everythings
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everything
 about the goods or other
simillar
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similar
 things. If we come to
some
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someplace
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place
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 with a messy situation
it's
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 will make
uncomfortable
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us uncomfortable
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for doing
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to do
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anythings
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anything
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.
In addition
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, with us
tyding
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tidying
 up some
places
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it's
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it
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 can control stress levels.
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, retrieved from when we feel extremely
tried
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tired
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 after we
work
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 all day and
then
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look
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see
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 the state of the house is tidy
it's
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it
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make
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makes
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feel
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us feel
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 comfortable. Definitely, there is
different
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a different
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 response if we
arrived
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 at
home
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 or
work
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place
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 with
messy
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a messy
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place
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.
On the other hand
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,
keep
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keeping
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 your
home
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 clean and
everythings
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everything
organize
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organised
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it
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apply
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wiil
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will
be
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make it easier to find some goods or
anythings
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anything
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.
Moreover
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, keeping a tidy environment can lead to increased productivity as
time
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a time
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not
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is not
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masted
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wasted
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 searching for misplaced items.
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, you don't have to look for your keys because you always put them in the right
place
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. That situation will make
you
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it
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 easier to manage your time.
To conclude
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,
keep
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keeping
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neatly
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neat
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 and
a
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apply
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tidy
places
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lead
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leads
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 you to being
diciplined
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disciplined
 personality. Without you realising it
is
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it
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 will
be make
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make
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 you have a healthy lifestyle. You will get used to it with a lot of activities because you usually
take
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get
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everythings
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everything
 organized.

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coherence cohesion
The essay presented a clear introduction and conclusion, providing a general view of the author's opinion. However, the logical structure could use improvement to ensure ideas flow more naturally. Introduction and conclusion are present although they could be stronger in summarizing the main points and providing a clear final thought.
coherence cohesion
The main argument is supported by examples, but these could be developed further with more specifics. Also, ensure that all main points are fully expanded upon to provide a comprehensive response to the task.
task achievement
The response addresses the task but does not fully explore its complexities. Consider expanding on your ideas to provide a more thorough exploration of why tidiness is important in both home and workplace environments through better-exemplified arguments.
task achievement
The clarity of ideas could be improved. Ensure each paragraph contains one clear main idea with examples for support. Check that each sentence contributes to the development of your arguments.
task achievement
While relevant examples were provided, they could be more specific and detailed to better support the main points of the essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Efficiency
  • Productivity
  • Organized
  • Clutter-free
  • Hygiene
  • Allergens
  • Creativity
  • Minimalist
  • Professionalism
  • Environmental consciousness
  • Sustainability
  • Calm
  • Time management
  • Aesthetically pleasing
  • Attention to detail
  • Economic
  • Impression
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