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The charts provide information about people’s travel in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts provide information about people’s travel in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 figure shows the number of
people
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 travelling in a country from 1995 to 2015 which is divided into their
travel
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 distance, time consumed, and
transportation
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 options they used during the
travel
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.
Overall
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, the furthest and the longest trip was done in 2005,
however
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, the lowest
as well as
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 the shortest trip was taken in 2015.
Furthermore
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, Other private
transport
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 is the popular
transportation
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 option compared to other
transportation
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, namely publicly used vehicles. In 1995, most of the travellers spent roughly 372
Hours
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 to
travel
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 to a country with 7000
miles
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 distances.
Moreover
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, there was a moderate climb in the year 2000, when
people
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 started to
travel
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further
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 to a country of about 7150
miles
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 away and travelling time rose by 10
hours
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. A few years later, in 2005 there was a plateau in the distance travelled,
otherwise
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, an enormous boom in travelling time, it increased to approximately 390
hours
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. 5 years from 2005, there was a significant deep in
travel
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 distances as
people
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 only travelled around 6700
miles
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 and only spent 370
hours
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 travelling.
In addition
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, a minimal fall hit in 2015 as the traveller spent approximately 365
hours
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 and 6600
miles
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 in distance. The most used mode of
transportation
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 throughout the year was private
transportation
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 aside from cycling. Starting in 1995, 62% of the population preferred to use private
transportation
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 as their option to
travel
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, following private
transport
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, 28% out of 100% population chose between walking and cycling,
whereas
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, the rest 9% preferred public
transportation
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 as their option. Starting from the year 2000 – 2010 there was a gradual decline in the mode of
transportation
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 for walking or cycling,
moreover
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, it was followed by a steep rise in travellers who used other private
transport
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 and public
transport
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. As of 2015, there was a plateau, in which
people
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 tended to consume the same mode of
transportation
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 as in 2010.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, travel, transportation, transport, hours, miles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "plateau" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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