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The bar chart below shows Scotland’s exports to the rest of the UK and the rest of the world for the year 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where necessary.

The bar chart below shows Scotland’s exports to the rest of the UK and the rest of the world for the year 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where necessary.
#bar #scotland’s #exports #rest #uk #world #year #information #features #comparisons
The bar graph illustrates that
scotland
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Scotland
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export
 to the
rest
 of the
UK
comparison
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in comparison
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 with the
rest
 of the
world
 in the year 2014 in many different
industry
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industries
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.
Overall
,the industry from the
rest
to
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of
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 the
world
are
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is
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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higher than
export
 to the
rest
 of the
UK
. In
the
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apply
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business services is the
most
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apply
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highest exporter from
rest
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the rest
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to
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of
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 the
world
.
In
contrast
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contrast,
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 the lowest was Agriculture and forestry that
export
 to
rest
 of the
UK
. In
business
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the business
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 sector, it is apparent that
export
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exports
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 to the
uk
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UK
has
Verb problem
are
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 1.7
billion
. When
comparision
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comparison
 with
export
to
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apply
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the
world
 has 13.8
billion
.
In
addition
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addition,
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 wholesale and retail depict that has 1.1
billion
 in
export
 to
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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 and it has 8.2
billion
 in
export
 to the
world
.
In contrast
 Electrical sector is the one sector that
export
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exports
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 to the
UK
 more than to the
world
show
Wrong verb form
showing
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 that
in
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apply
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export
Fix the agreement mistake
exports
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 to
Correct article usage
the Uk
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Uk
Correct your spelling
UK
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has
Verb problem
are
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 4
billion
 which is more than
export
Fix the agreement mistake
exports
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 to the
world
 has 2.3
billion
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, rest, uk, world, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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