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The bar chart below shows Scotland’s exports to the rest of the UK and the rest of the world for the year 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where necessary.

The bar chart below shows Scotland’s exports to the rest of the UK and the rest of the world for the year 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where necessary.
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The bar graph illustrates that
scotland
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export
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 to the
rest
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 of the
UK
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comparison
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in comparison
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 with the
rest
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 of the
world
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 in the year 2014 in many different
industry
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,the industry from the
rest
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to
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of
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 the
world
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are
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is
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the
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apply
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higher than
export
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 to the
rest
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 of the
UK
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. In
the
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business services is the
most
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highest exporter from
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rest
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the rest
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to
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of
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 the
world
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contrast
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 the lowest was Agriculture and forestry that
export
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 to
rest
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 of the
UK
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. In
business
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the business
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 sector, it is apparent that
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export
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exports
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 to the
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uk
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UK
has
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 1.7
billion
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. When
comparision
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comparison
 with
export
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to
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the
world
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 has 13.8
billion
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addition
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 wholesale and retail depict that has 1.1
billion
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 in
export
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 to
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UK
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the UK
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 and it has 8.2
billion
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 in
export
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 to the
world
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 Electrical sector is the one sector that
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export
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exports
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 to the
UK
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 more than to the
world
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show
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showing
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 that
in
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apply
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export
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exports
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 to
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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has
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are
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 4
billion
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 which is more than
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export
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exports
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 to the
world
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 has 2.3
billion
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, rest, uk, world, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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