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The table and bar graph below showstime spent in leisure and householdactivities in the UK. Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the mainfeatures, and make comparisonswhere relevant.

The table and bar graph below showstime spent in leisure and householdactivities in the UK. Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the mainfeatures, and make comparisonswhere relevant.
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The sheet and graph give information on the movement recorded in the free day between
Men
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 and
Women
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, and household
moment
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. It is clearly seen that TV, video, and radio are major
activities
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 in the comfort time between
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 and
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 in sharp contrast to Reading and Sport,
moreover
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,
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 recorded the highest rate of cooking and Washing in household
activities
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 as compared with
Men
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. In detail, TV, video, and radio recorded the highest rate of action in free time between
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 and
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 with 137 and 118 as opposed to reading and sports had a lower
number
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 of leisure
activities
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 in both genders.
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, cooking and washing included the high level of
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 of
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 in family
activities
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 around 77, as much as shopping, and clothes washing recorded to about 46 and 30.
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, the activity of repair in
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 recorded around 14, which is the only activity in the home
that is
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 lower than in
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.
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, the activity of cooking and washing includes the
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 of
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 to almost 30,
while
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 shopping and repair occupy the
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 around 14 and 19. Twenty-two of
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 who spending time
for
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clothes washing and ironing in household
activities
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, activities, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution of time
  • leisure activities
  • household activities
  • comparative analysis
  • societal preferences
  • lifestyle choices
  • demographic groups
  • time allocation
  • trends and patterns
  • social or economic changes
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