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The bar chart below shows Scotland’s exports to the rest of the UK and the rest of the world for the year 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where necessary.

The bar chart below shows Scotland’s exports to the rest of the UK and the rest of the world for the year 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where necessary.
#bar #scotland’s #exports #rest #uk #world #year #information #features #comparisons
The bar chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the rates of exports of scotland of industrial
products
 in 2014 from
UK
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the UK
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 and
other's
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other
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 countries in the world .,
overall
,
that is
 clear seeing the figure
of
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for
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 chemicals and Mineral
products
are
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is
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 more than
others
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the others
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of
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for
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 exports to UKA
where as
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whereas
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, The figure
of
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for
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 Business
servies
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services
 and finance ,Hotels ,
Restaurants
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and Restaurants
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servies
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services
products
are
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is
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recored
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recorded
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a hight
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hight
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high
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 number.
Recorrding
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According
Recording
 to the information given
of
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in
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bar
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the bar
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 chart we can notice
that is
products
 of UKA exports
recoreding
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recording
 low
presntage
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percentage
 about 0.6 to 4.4
finacial
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financial
 rewarding 5000 billion .
However
, world countries have
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a hight
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hight
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high
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proporation
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proportion
 of rate
products
it
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which
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 is around (9.0 to 13.8) with
8to
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8 to
 14 billion
incom
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income
during 2014. that main scotland
products
 are more
sallering
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alluring
selling
 to other's countries in the world than UKA.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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