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The line graph shows the number of books borrowed from four libraries in the mouths of June, July, August and September of

The line graph shows the number of books borrowed from four libraries in the mouths of June, July, August and September of
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The given line charts show the
numbers
Fix the agreement mistake
number
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 of books borrowed from four libraries
in
Change preposition
from
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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June up to September. The four
reading-places
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reading places
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describe
Wrong verb form
described
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 above are West Eaton,
Ryeslip
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, Sutton Wood and Church Mount, each of them
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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 illustrated with distinct colours i.e. Blue, Red, Green, and Purple respectively. Generally,
Ryeslip
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 had the greatest number of borrowed books, except for July in which Sutton Wood was leading.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, Church Mount is consistently the place with the least amount of rented books,
although
Linking Words
 in June, both
this
Linking Words
 and West Eaton showed as little. Considering the progress of monthly numbers,
Ryeslip
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, despite being the top library, seems to receive a downslope interest. Meanwhile,
on the contrary
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, both West Eaton and Church
month
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Month
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has
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
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an
Correct article usage
apply
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increasing popularity,
although
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 never
reach
Wrong verb form
reached
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 the extent of
Ryeslip
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. Sutton Wood,
however
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, fluctuates drastically, with a decline from July to Augst, but
rise
Correct subject-verb agreement
rises
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 back up and being the highest score in September.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ryeslip with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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