The line graph shows the number of books borrowed from four libraries in the mouths of June, July, August and September of

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The given line charts show the

numbers

Fix the agreement mistake

number

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of books borrowed from four libraries

Change preposition

from

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the

Correct article usage

apply

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June up to September. The four

reading-places

Correct your spelling

reading places

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describe

Wrong verb form

described

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above are West Eaton,

Ryeslip

, Sutton Wood and Church Mount, each of them

are

Correct subject-verb agreement

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illustrated with distinct colours i.e. Blue, Red, Green, and Purple respectively. Generally,

Ryeslip

had the greatest number of borrowed books, except for July in which Sutton Wood was leading.

On the other hand

, Church Mount is consistently the place with the least amount of rented books,

although

in June, both

this

and West Eaton showed as little. Considering the progress of monthly numbers,

Ryeslip

, despite being the top library, seems to receive a downslope interest. Meanwhile,

on the contrary

, both West Eaton and Church

month

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Month

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has

Correct subject-verb agreement

have

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Correct article usage

apply

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increasing popularity,

although

never

reach

Wrong verb form

reached

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the extent of

Ryeslip

. Sutton Wood,

however

, fluctuates drastically, with a decline from July to Augst, but

rise

Correct subject-verb agreement

rises

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back up and being the highest score in September.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words ryeslip with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

156 words

6.50

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

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