Most countries allow 18-year olds to start driving a car. Some say it is good to allow at this age. But others think that the age to start driving should be at least 25. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

In recent
years
many
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policy allows
people
who reach 18
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old to
driving
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a vehicle
such
as
car
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.
In contrast
, some believe that the best
age
to begin
driving
car
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a car
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at
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is at
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least 25. I strongly believe that both of
this
has
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and positive
impact
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for
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society especially
for
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young
people
,
however
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it
is never mind
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if young
people
with 18
year
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old driving
car
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cars
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. The next paragraph will discuss
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issues with arguments. First of all, if the
people
who
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18
years
old can
has
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have
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the
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positive impact
for
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their parents because they
dont
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don't
need to pick up in
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school
everyday
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anymore. It can build
independent
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an independent
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side for the young
people
.
For example
, when I was in senior high
school
in
the
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first
year
my aunt always picked up me
in
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the
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school
and I
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it was exhausting for her. In the second
years
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of
the
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apply
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school
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school,
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I tried to
drived
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drive
a
car
and it
was
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made me
happines
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happy
because my aunt
can
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could
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rest in the evening time and I always went to
school
by myself.
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,
the
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18
years
was the right
age
because
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young
people
can explore the world
with
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their
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own ways
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ways
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through travelling. At the same time,
for
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some
people
who not in
high
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the high
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economic class will be find
this
difficult because they
dont
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don't
have money to buy
car
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a car
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for
the
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children.
In addition
, society
believe
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that the
age
of 25th
was
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is
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the right line because
people
in
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this
age
has
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mature
mind
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minds
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and can control their
ego
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when driving
in
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on
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the road.
For instance
, my friend with the
driver
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licence
in
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on
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25th
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the 25th
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was totally clear and comfortable for the passenger compared with my friend who
drived
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drove
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in
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their 18th. It can be seen the
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difference
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different
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of control
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between controlling
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the vehicle and driving in
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a traffic
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traffic
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jam.
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, when
people
start
in
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at
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this
age
it will be difficult to have training because they will
busy
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be busy
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in
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with
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worklife
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work
or university. In conclusion, the first policy
who
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that
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allows
people
with
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18t
year
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years
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old
driving
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to drive
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can
improved
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independent thing in the
yong
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young
people
but it can
make
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pressure
for
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their parents with less economic.
Then
,
second
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policies give the smart drive generation but they
maybe
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may
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dont hav etime
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not have time
to practice how to drive well
in
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at
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that
age
.
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