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Most countries allow 18-year olds to start driving a car. Some say it is good to allow at this age. But others think that the age to start driving should be at least 25. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

In recent
years
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countries
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 policy allows
people
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 who reach 18
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year
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years
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 old to
driving
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 a vehicle
such
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 as
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car
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a car
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.
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, some believe that the best
age
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to begin
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car
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a car
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at
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is at
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 least 25. I strongly believe that both of
this
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 and positive
impact
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for
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 society especially
for
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on
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 young
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,
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however
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is never mind
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 if young
people
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 with 18
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year
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years
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 old driving
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car
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cars
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. The next paragraph will discuss
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 issues with arguments. First of all, if the
people
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was
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years
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has
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have
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the
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a
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for
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 their parents because they
dont
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don't
 need to pick up in
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school
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everyday
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 anymore. It can build
independent
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 side for the young
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, when I was in senior high
school
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the
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 first
year
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 my aunt always picked up me
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the
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school
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 and I
realize
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 it was exhausting for her. In the second
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years
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year
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 of
the
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apply
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school
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school,
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drived
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drive
 a
car
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 and it
was
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made me
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happy
 because my aunt
can
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 rest in the evening time and I always went to
school
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 by myself.
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,
the
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18
years
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age
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 because
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young
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 can explore the world
with
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 their
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own ways
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ways
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way
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 through travelling. At the same time,
for
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some
people
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 who not in
high
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the high
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 economic class will be find
this
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 difficult because they
dont
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don't
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car
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a car
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 for
the
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 children.
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, society
believe
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believes
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 that the
age
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 of 25th
was
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is
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 the right line because
people
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in
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at
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this
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age
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has
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have
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mind
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 and can control their
ego
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egos
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 when driving
in
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on
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 the road.
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, my friend with the
driver
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driver's
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 licence
in
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on
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25th
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 was totally clear and comfortable for the passenger compared with my friend who
drived
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drove
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in
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on
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 their 18th. It can be seen the
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difference
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different
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difference
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of control
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between controlling
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 the vehicle and driving in
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a traffic
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traffic
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 jam.
Than
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, when
people
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 start
in
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at
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this
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age
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 it will be difficult to have training because they will
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be busy
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in
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with
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worklife
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work
 or university. In conclusion, the first policy
who
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 allows
people
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with
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apply
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18t
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year
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years
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 old
driving
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to drive
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 can
improved
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improve
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 independent thing in the
yong
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young
people
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 but it can
make
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put
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 pressure
for
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 their parents with less economic.
Then
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,
second
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 policies give the smart drive generation but they
maybe
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may
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dont hav etime
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not have time
 to practice how to drive well
in
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at
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 that
age
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.

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coherence cohesion
The essay overall lacks a coherent and logical structure, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argumentation. You should organize your ideas into clear paragraphs, each addressing a specific point, and ensure your essay flows naturally from one idea to the next.
coherence cohesion
An introduction and conclusion are present, but they barely address the requirements of the task. A stronger thesis statement and more conclusive summary of the arguments are needed in the introduction and conclusion respectively to effectively frame the essay.
coherence cohesion
Some main points are supported with examples, but the connections between them are weak. You need to clearly explain how your examples support your argument, and make sure that they are directly relevant to the question at hand.
task achievement
While the essay attempts to address the task, it does not do it fully or convincingly. Work on developing your ideas more comprehensively and ensure that you discuss both sides of the argument, as well as your own opinion, with equal depth and clear reasoning.
task achievement
Your ideas are not expressed clearly and in a structured manner. To improve, you should present each idea individually and expand upon it with clear explanations and detailed examples. This will make your essay more comprehensive and understandable.
task achievement
Relevant examples are provided, but you should further elaborate on them to clearly show how they relate to the argument and strengthen the points you are making. Ensure your examples are specific and directly support your stance on the issue.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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