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The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#information #challenges #people #face #countries #▪️summarise #features #comparisons
The chart describes the data about the
challenge
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challenges
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population
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the population
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who
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apply
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are facing
to live
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living
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 in other
staes
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states
stages
. Comparison by percentages in three
differents
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different
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 groups.
From the
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The
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overall
, learning the local
languages
in
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at
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 the elder
age
 was
on
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at
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 the top
while
the
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making was lowest. Following by the young
age
group
 was
on
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in
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middle
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the middle
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 of the comparison. Despite that
in
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apply
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the middle
age
group
are
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apply
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stood
in
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at
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 the same level of three factors. Starting at the
age
 of 18 to 34 they are more pointing on making
a
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apply
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friends at 46% and finding somewhere to live at 40%, was less
propotion
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proportion
 that are interested in the local
languages
 at 29%.
While
, the
age
 of 35 to 54 are on the average in those three factors, making friends and learning
languages
 was standing at 35% -36% and finding places to live was stood at 39%.
However
, the
last
group
 of
age
 was
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an elder
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elder
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elderly
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group
.
Poeple
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People
 who are retired from their work ahs more
times
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time
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 to do
as
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apply
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what they need to. Learning
the
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apply
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others
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other
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languages
 was the highest at 54% and making 23%
then
 22% of them
was
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were
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 interested in
to
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apply
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finding places to live
Submitted by Chaiyapat Soka on

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words languages, age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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