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The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphic illustrates the process of how the honey is produced by
bees
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. There are apparently two main parts, starting with collecting
nectar
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 outside of the
hive
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 and
then
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 manufacturing it in the
hive
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.
Firstly
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,
bees
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 leave their
hive
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, finding the flowers which are filled with
nectar
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.
Subsequently
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,
bees
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 grab a sweet liquid called
nectar
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 which is produced by flowers. Following on, the
nectar
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 is moved from flowers to a
hive
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 and stored in the cells which are the units of the
hive
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. Next in the process,
bees
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 start to flap their wings in order to produce airflow on cells full of
nectar
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.
Following
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this
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, the airflow causes the
nectar
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 to evaporate which removes the water in it.
Lastly
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, several layers of honey are produced in the
hive
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 and ready to be put into jars. In conclusion, honey is produced through seven steps which are carried out by the cooperation of
bees
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, and accumulated by a lot of cells of the
hive
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.
Submitted by J.C.Li.1997.11 on

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bees, nectar, hive with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Metamorphosis
  • Nectar
  • Foraging
  • Pollination
  • Worker bees
  • House bees
  • Honey stomach
  • Honeycomb cells
  • Beeswax
  • Evaporation
  • Hexagon-shaped
  • Simple sugars
  • Enzymes
  • Capping
  • Preserve
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