The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphic illustrates the process of how the honey is produced by
bees
. There are apparently two main parts, starting with collecting nectar
outside of the hive
and then
manufacturing it in the hive
.
Firstly
, bees
leave their hive
, finding the flowers which are filled with nectar
. Subsequently
, bees
grab a sweet liquid called nectar
which is produced by flowers. Following on, the nectar
is moved from flowers to a hive
and stored in the cells which are the units of the hive
.
Next in the process, bees
start to flap their wings in order to produce airflow on cells full of nectar
. Following
this
, the airflow causes the nectar
to evaporate which removes the water in it. Lastly
, several layers of honey are produced in the hive
and ready to be put into jars.
In conclusion, honey is produced through seven steps which are carried out by the cooperation of bees
, and accumulated by a lot of cells of the hive
.Submitted by J.C.Li.1997.11 on
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